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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
I... I... I.

I don't even know what to say. Your last sentence just gave me the worst chill bumps EVER.

Like, EVER.

How did you DO that?! Here I was, thinking that this story was simply a one-shot--a rather GREAT one-shot--but no.

It's a story, and the fact that you've become Fred's ghost... Chilling.

Stop it.

Wait, no. Continue! Chill bumps are good things, especially at the end of such a chapter as this one.

In the spirit of coherent thought (who needs it, really?), I will say that I've found nothing out of place with this chapter. Everything was spot on, perfectly timed. I really enjoyed the story that he told about the Death conversation, especially since it came at a moment of near-peril. Through it all, I felt like I was actually there, seeing the kid get cursed, and then seeing Fred fall (not for the last time).

I also like the idea of the Weasley twins with long beards that they wrap like sashes around their robes... I only wish it would come true...

But Fred's PoV of his death... That was what got me. So... CHILLING. I hate the fact that he didn't even enjoy the joke he made as he laughed his way to death. I hate that he hates how he died as a punchline. By the way--that metaphor--is still echoing in my mind. It won't stop... SO much sad, sad feels. :'(

I know that this is the kind of story where it has to fall apart, I KNOW that... But first he was broken, and then he was THERE, and then he was broken again... I'm rambling, aren't I?

Sorry, but you're just too amazing. Stop that! No, wait. Continue!! :)

You've got amazing skills, so please keep being amazing. Forever.



P.S. Sorry for the incoherent-ness of this review. I'm just trying to find a way to express my reaction to this chapter... I hope I've gotten the general point across!

Author's Response: Bahahaha! Your review made me grin like an idiot :D Thank you for this! You've just boosted my confidence by 12409812%, as this chapter is one of my least favourite chapters so far. I was so incredibly worried that I got Fred's voice wrong and all...and I was actually planning to rewrite this chapter and make it a bit more consistent with my newest chapter (4).

Fred is such a difficult character to catch, m. Completely opposite of the kinds of characters I like to write and I suppose throughout the length of this fic (and it will be a longer fic...much longer than a oneshot :P...) I'm going to constantly feel insecure about my characters :P But thank you so so much for your lovely words.

What you said about the everything being "spot on, perfectly timed" is just such a tremendous compliment. *teary*



PS:.and I've re-requested at your thread for the next chapter eheheh...hope you don't mind :P

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