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Review:Avis12 says:
Hey new friend!

So I'm here for the review tag which is funny because you reviewed me earlier. Anyways...here goes:

I honestly think it's a good start to a story. Even though I've yet to read on I'm sure it gets even better. I think you've done a great job of letting the reader know what Molly's personality is like. She is strong, independent, and a little bit sassy (I think.)

However, beneath those layers I think we are going to see a softer side of Molly. When she said "perhaps" to Cyrus I think it really let us know that she isn't as cold as some people think she is.

Besides a few grammar errors this was really well written. The only thing I can say is to vary between the paragraphs and the single sentences. It seemed to me like there was a lot of big paragraphs in a row and then it would switch to a lot of small sentences in a row. Just a little suggestion!

Like I said before: Great start to a story, I'm going to have to read on sometime to see what happens between her and the rockstar :)

-Avis12

Author's Response: Hello!

I really do need to go back and edit this at some point! People keep mentioning the grammatical mistakes and I know I still have a lot to work on with my writing!

I'm glad you can see that there are two sides to Molly, and that her softer side comes across as well. Thanks for your CC and the review!

nott theodore :)


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