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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
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This story is turning out to be really fun and easy to read! I love that Molly said no initially to the date. I wanted her to say yes after reading the first chapter, but this set-up was even better than having her agree straight out. From what we've seen of Molly so far, she takes her job very seriously, so I can see her declining the invitation so as not to appear unprofessional. But I'm so glad you managed to get them together anyway.

The detail with the waitress was a really nice touch. I loved the line, "Luckily, he seems quite oblivious to the attention and she sashays away, swinging her hips so much I'm surprised she doesn't fall over." It's great to see that even your background characters have some dimension.

Molly is so blunt! I love that. I love how she just comes out and says she agreed to the date because she felt sorry for Cyrus, and how she rejected his training center because it was a stupid idea. She isn't trying to be mean, but she doesn't sugarcoat the truth, does she? It was nice to see some insecurity and uncertainty from her though too. Sometimes quirky or humorous characters can be a little one-dimensional or cartoonish, but Molly clear has some depth to her. I liked that you included the subtle references to her family's fame. Clearly it's something that bothers her on some level and could be an issue if she gets into a relationship with someone else who's very well known.

Another cliffhanger of sorts! I love when authors end chapters in a way that leaves the reader guessing. My only "CC" is that I was a little surprised to see Cyrus wearing a dragon skin jacket being that he likes dragons so much. But other than that, this was another fun chapter. Hopefully I have a chance to tag you in the review thread again soon!

Author's Response: Hello!

Well, Molly couldn't really have said no to a date with Cyrus, could she? But her job is very important to her and she doesn't want to seem unprofessional, so she wasn't going to say yes straight away, either.

Yes, Molly is blunt - I like to think that the filter between her brain and her mouth doesn't always work! I had a lot of fun writing that, because I'm generally far too polite to say what I'm really thinking. She does have insecurities, and that was one of the most important things for me writing this. I really wanted her to seem realistic.

Her family's fame is one of her issues, and it's part of why she doesn't have a close relationship with her family. It's not really that she resents them for being famous; she dislikes the attention that she gets just for being associated with them, rather than for what she's done. It's very rare that she meets someone who understands that she wants to be liked for herself rather than her family.

Oops! I never actually thought about the dragon skin jacket! I'll probably edit that, but until I get the chance, I'll say that Cyrus only wears dragon skin clothes if they come from the shedded skin of a dragon? That's probably not a very satisfactory explanation, but thanks for pointing it out!

I'm glad to hear that you're enjoying the story, and thanks for the review!

nott theodore :)


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