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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Oh, the suspense!! Oh, the drama!! I might be going insane now!!

Insane in a good way, of course!! I loveloveloved this chapter, maybe even more than the last one!

Sirius and Barty... In cahoots together? It seems strange, but here, it makes a lot of sense. Why can't Barty trust Regulus? Why does he trust Sirius with the task of checking out the body? Why is he so creepy? Why, why, why?!

I feel like Barty has a lot of ulterior motives, as if he's trying to pit the family members against each other, dividing the house, you know? I could be wrong, but I just can't come up with a good reason to reconcile everything in my brain! This whole chapter has left me in a tizzy!

All the confusion aside, though, your descriptive powers have not waned any. I really liked how you started off the chapter with Sirius' fingers instead of showing the whole scene. It was like a movie, where they show the part before the whole, so that you don't really know what's going on until they actually reveal it.

I'm no detective, so I can't even begin to name the killer right now. This review is probably completely muddy and jumbled because I'm just trying to figure it all out. Barty is a creep, and he's plotting something, because that's what he does, but if he's the killer, he's a convincing liar. He makes everyone doubt themselves... Except for Regulus, of course. Regulus has his own agenda, and I'm not sure what he's doing in the Library. Or why he lied to Barty and Sirius. Mighty suspicious!!

But my mind is telling me "NO, that can't be it!! What reason does Regulus have to kill a member of his own family?! He's just a child!" And yet, you're probably laughing at me right now, because I'm so incorrect.

Regulus is manipulative. The look that he gives Barty that causes him to cave and share what's going on, the lie he tells, his constantly calm demeanor... He's very multi-layered, and I haven't read a lot of stories with him as a major character, but I feel like he's going to play a big role in this one!

And Bellatrix... What a schizo! She probably scares me the most out of all of the lovely, crazy characters you've developed thus far. She's like the Sphinx, so magical, but one wrong move, and she'll bite your little head off! The sugar-and-spice metaphor was SUPER amazing, and it makes me think that she's got a borderline personality disorder. (Sorry, Psychology has got me classifying EVERYTHING.) She has all these crazy changes in mood, even within the space of a few words! I think she's insane, but MAN, you write fantastically!! Most people couldn't pull off the type of mood swings that make Bella who she is, but I think you've got it just perfectly!

So, in short, the whole family is insane. And creepy. And I love them while also being afraid of them. Thank you, Aphoride, for making me feel so many emotions all at once, for a cast of characters that build their empires on dead bodies!

You're awesome. Just sayin'.

:)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hey again! Thank you so much for coming back here! :)

Sirius and Barty are in cahoots together... :P Weird yes, but there is a point to it ;) And... I honestly can't answer any of those questions without giving things away and thus spoiling things for you, sorry!

Haha, you're so perceptive! :) Yeah, Barty is a bit of a stirrer - he likes the drama - but, honestly, he knows no more than the rest of them! (I think I can tell you that...) He definitely has ulterior motives, but what they are I can't tell you :P

Ah, gosh, thank you so much! I always worry that I put too much description in, so I'm so glad you to see you like it all! I did worry with the fireguard that it would seem a little odd, but it seems to be okay... thank you!

I would be kinda impressed if you could name the killer at this stage, tbh! Seriously, seriously impressed! Barty's definitely creepy and both he and Regulus definitely have their agendas... but I can tell you that you may be onto something... And I'm not laughing at you, if that helps any ;)

He's very manipulative - but I've always thought he would have to be, you know? He's the youngest in a large family all obsessed with lineage, babied by his mother, etc. He will have a fairly large role in this, but no spoilers! :P

Like a Sphinx... I love that metaphor! Forget mine, yours is better! :P She's not quite crazy yet, but she definitely has some kind of personality disorder... I've always loved her character because in the books she's so complicated - she's so utterly loyal and fearless and yet terrified of Voldemort and obsessive and so cruel... Thank you so much! I love her character so much so I'm so glad you thought I did her justice!

Haha, they are! I know exactly what you mean - I'd love to watch them interact, but not be there with them... they might kill me :P

Thank you so so much for this review! You're such an amazing reviewer - you pick up on so much! Thank you so much! :) :) :)

Aph xx


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