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Review:sweaterweather21 says:
Good chapter. I really enjoyed seeing both sides of Scorpius - the eager student wanting to be at least friends with Lily (I saw right through the tutoring scheme, I'm assuming he just wanted to spend time with her) and the jealous prat. You did a nice job portraying both of them.

A little bit of criticism here- Lily seems a bit fake. I get that she's at the point where she's realizing that Scorpius just might have a crush on her, but her thoughts don't seem to go much further than that. She hasn't thought about how going with Tom to Hogsmeade might make him jealous and just her though process in general seems a bit too simple.

You have a really great story going here. I love the initial concept, and you're doing a good job sticking to the plot (Scorpius=James Potter I and Lily Potter=Lily Evans) and the action is coming along well- I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review!
I'm really happy both sides of Scorpius came out. He is a really interesting character to write, and it's a lot easier to write him than Lily.
Lily is getting there. What you said about using Tom to make Scorpius jealous, it's really funny that you mentioned that because that has a big part in later chapters. The next few chapters are more for setting up the grand finale I have written out, and I'm so excited to post the rest of the story (the queue needs to speed up!!).
Keep reading :)


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