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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! I'm here to do the review you've requested!

What with the couple of word changes that just happened, I was a little confused. However, I got the hang of it!

I'm never overly critical, so no worries!!

A few things I was confused about: Why do the situations keep switching? Are they changes in POV? If so, could you show that a little more clearly by putting their names above their different segments?
At times, I was very uncertain about what was going on, and it is only now that I realize it might all be due to a switch in Point of View. (Oooh, a rhyme!)

You might also want to work on clearing up your diction and syntax a little bit. Sometimes your sentences were just a bit unclear, and the plot is intriguing, so I'd like to see everything in a bit more color.

That was the criticism portion. Now, on to the praise! :)

You've done very well with setting up the suspense... There are definitely strange things afoot in the Wizarding World, and I'm wondering what could be going on. What ties all of these mysterious POVs together? How will everyone come together to make the story come alive?

I hope I've been helpful to you in your writing journey!



Author's Response: Hey! thanks for doing this!

yeah there are 3 characters haha. So there is POV change throughout the story.

I will go bk to look at my diction and syntax (thanks for mentioning it!)

im glad you liked it!

thanks for the review!


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