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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello! Iím here from the swap :D

I really liked how you started. Iím often wary about started with a dream/flashback scene as theyíre can often be a bit of a jolt to the reader, and theyíre left wondering whatís happened but it really fitted here, and tied in perfectly with the rest of the story.

I also liked how we got to see more characters here. We often donít get to see the family, as people tend to focus just on the siblings, but I was glad to see the appearance from Bill and Fleur here, as Iíve always loved those two.

I got that Teddy and Dom were meant to be together, but Iím so used to seeing him and Victoire paired together it was still a bit of shock, so perhaps if you added a little sentence clarifying that, as Dom/Teddy stories arenít as common, so it was a little shocking.

The healer scenes were really great too, with the paralytic charm, and the healer questioning what she dreamt about. It all seemed really accurate, and I really loved that as that accuracy is often missing from medical scenes.

It was a good chapter, and I loved the family reaction!

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing. Sorry for the delay in responding!

I am glad you liked how I started this especially since you're wary of dream sequences. This one was particularly tricky to write so I am pleased you found it to fit in.

I always consider family an important part of people's lives, and you'll definitely be seeing more of Fleur and Victoire at least =)

Teddy and Dom are my OTP. Don't ask why, I don't remember when I fell in love with them, haha. You'll see how Teddy/Dom got together in the next chapter, it should hopefully be enough clarification!

It's such a great relief and joy to hear you liked my healer scenes. I have no idea about medical stuff so what I wrote was on pure online research and I was very unsure about the part, so I am so happy you found it accurate and such.

Thanks a lot for all your kind words!

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