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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
HOPPY EASTER, hahaha. :)

I saw your shoutout for a review swap on the forums, and I thought, "Why not?!" So here I am!

This introductory chapter was quite heavy and suspenseful. It makes a nice change from what I've been reading lately (too much humor can kill, I think!). Dominique is characterized wonderfully by her actions--I like that you've done a lot of backstory without the backstory. You've basically put her here, in this crazy situation, and then shown us what's come before. I like it!!

However, I could use a little more action, which probably will come in the next few chapters. I'd like to see the sweat on the friendly werewolf's brow as he tells Dominique to seek shelter from the impending rampage. I'd like to watch as she took the assignment. A few flashbacks (and this is just personal preference, no need to take my advice!) would be nice, and maybe a bit of dialogue.

But really, you've done very well with setting up the scene for the rest of the story. It's pretty ironic that Dominique's family and friends have such a history of lycanthropy, and yet she's afraid, and then, on top of it all, she gets bitten. I'm so glad that I read this chapter! :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

I am glad you found the introductory chapter done well. I was afraid of putting too much filler-ish information here but I am pleased to hear you liked the way I did it, thanks!

Well, I am more of an emotion person rather than action so I am not sure if you'll be seeing more action, but you have given me some nice ideas for a few flashbacks plus forward moments, so thanks. And of course dialogue is going to be there =P

Its a relief to know that you think I did well with setting the scene as that was my intention. Thanks a lot for reading & reviewing!


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