I have just read all the 20 chapters so far in one go... (Well, if you don't include all the little activities of daily life in between. I have 4 weeks off for easter, so it's fine ;D) Therefore this review will be on the whole story so far.
I LOVE this story, and I LOVE your writing. You really capture teenage/school life perfectly. So well in fact that it makes me want to be at school again, experiencing all the drama, feelings of first love...etc. Obviously at my school I didn't have magic, quidditch and werewolves, despite my disappointment haha.
I think what makes this story work so brilliantly, aside from your talented writing, are your characters. Their strengths and weaknesses make them strong characters and they're so relatable. They're also hilarious, and humour is ALWAYS a good thing to have. Scorpius is one of my favourite characters just because he seems to lighten everyone up whenever he's around, and the things he says always make me giggle.
However, I do think we need to see Albus more deeply. We know he's good at noticing things, he knows everything! But I think we need to know more of what he thinks himself, like his problems, his feelings. Does he like anyone more than a friend?
I could ramble on and on and write a huge review, but basically; I love it. I love your writing. I love your characters and I love your humour. I also love Jellie and Chleo. Anddd, I think that there is nothing wrong with a male writing fluffy stories! Although, I am curious about your age, but don't say anything, that's private :)
I apologise for blabbling!! Update soon!
Author's Response: Wow! Really? All of them?? I'm impressed and suuppeeer flattered :D
Oh snap! Geez, this review...I'm not even sure that I can articulate how flattering all of your words are!
My characters...basically, they're like my children (did that sound strange? Yes? Sorry...).
Oh Albus. Yeah...well, there's a chapter coming up that really "introduces" his depth, but I want to go more into his character in my sequel (yeah...I know it's a lame idea, but the story is an Albus/OC). He's kind of in a situation where he's babysitting his friends and family :P That's a lame excuse for not giving him a significant other in this story, but I didn't want to set everybody up...it's so much work setting the three kids up ;)
Geez...I love this review! It's really helping to motivate me to finish this work. Really, you're amazing.
Yeah, a male writing a fluffy work...how did my life come to this? Oh well...I'll just go even this all out with a few action flicks.
Don't apologise! I enjoyed it very much :D