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Review:AlexFan says:
Alrighty, I'll just get right to the review then why don't I?

I noticed that you kept switching between third person and first person POV so you might want to watch out for that.

The majority of this review will most likely be about the eyes thing.

There were these descriptions about his eyes being regal and holding stuff and the only thing that I kept thinking every time that came up was "they're just eyes, they don't hold anything, they don't show any emotion. They're just eyes." You're not the only one who does it, lots of authors do but it really bugs me because it makes no sense. They're just eyes, they don't show emotion, sure it would make his face regal or his face could have an emotion but not the eyes.

Also, is Lucy wearing a long or short dress? Because when she starts snogging Raoul she hugs him with her legs (it's now I describe it okay!) and I had just assumed Lucy was wearing a long dress. Just wondering about that.

There were a couple of grammatical errors here and there but nothing too big but other than that, this was pretty good.

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