|Review:||Bobby Dazzler says:|
Hello there lovely! Here to give you a belated review from my review request thread. So sorry about the delay, had some technical difficulties (ie. daughter spilling water on my laptop and now it wont charge - HEARTATTACK!!!) Anywho... :)
I too am a bit of a sucker for Bill/Fleur stories, and since they're so rare, they're even more special and enjoyable, especially when they're well written, which this was. I thought you did the characters justice and it was a nice fluff piece, which sometimes is all that's needed to let the whole story fall into place. We don't need to know how dinner went, because we know how it would've went thanks to canon. So I like that you kind of left it open to canon to fill in the blanks, wish more people did that sometimes :)
There was only one thing I wanted to point out in this that just struck me as a little... well, breaking with the writing style I suppose? It was from Fleur's POV, but there was one or two instances there where you broke from that and went to Bill's POV, which although it was lovely getting a little insight into his thoughts as well, I kind of think it didn't justify what you were trying to acheive with the rest of the story, as Fleur's narrative voice was strong and said it all anyway. Rather than Bill's narrative voice needing to be heard, it would've been nice, in my opinion anyway, if it was Fleur making observations about Bill's character to explain how she interpretted him to be thinking and feeling towards their encounter in the bank, so it all stayed in her POV and her narrative, as it was her story to be told, not Bill's.
That would be my only bit of criticism, as I really did enjoy it otherwise. I thought it was engaging, clever and amusing. And I liked how you told us about her experiences of the tri-wizard tournament and the other champions. I thought that was really good reading that, and poor Cedric :(
I thought this was great, and as I said, that would be my only thing to think about. Aside from that, it was great! Thanks for asking me to read it, loved it :) Bobby xx
Author's Response: Hi Bobby! Don't worry about how long it took, I now what happens when you spill liquids onto computers.
I'm so glad that you thought I did the characters justice. I've always had a soft spot for them both too, so I really wanted to write them well :) I'm glad that you liked I didn't include the dinner scene, I just felt it was unncessary as it would just be them looking dreamily at each other ;D
Yeah I didn't really know how to handle that part, as I didn't particularly want a POV change as I thought it would be odd. I do love your suggestion so I think I'll go back and edit it in :D
I'm glad that you liked the bit about the Triwizard Tournament as I was little unsure about that, and then the thing about Cedric. I did feel bad for him when writing it.
Thank you so much for this review, it was so useful, and I'm glad that you loved it :D