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Review:Alexandra M. Camilleri says:
Greetings,

I originally read this particular story on the site fanfiction . net however I am was very pleased to see that you have continued to update this story on this site.

I quite like the fact that you subtly added more links to the Harry Potter universe by giving your characters, Helen Black and Alexander Moody, such recognisable surnames. I also must commend you on the excellent characterisation; I cannot help but feel exactly what Helen feels. And Moody is simply wonderful - I love the pairing so much. Helen is also a very likeable and believable. To me she is exactly how a noble lady on the run should act like; strong, independent, stubborn and slightly spoilt. On the other hand, Moody threw me off at first. I quickly wrote him off as just a secondary character whose purpose was to only highlight the paranoia our heroine feels and yet, his is an ever fluctuating and evolving character. I cannot wait to see fully the dimensions of Helen's and Moody's relationship. Your descriptions are vivid and yet not too taxing - there is a balance between the visual experience and any introspective thoughts that Helen might observe.

All in all, I hope that you continue with this story because, like you, I also enjoy reading adventure stories a la Indiana Jones and so forth. It is a well-written story with a unique plot and good characterisation. It also has the perfect set of genres: adventure, mystery, crime, romance, mythology and fantasy! What could be better?

Thank you for your time and patience.

Alexandra M. Camilleri

(I also love the fact that you used Ingrid Bergman to depict Helen in the banners.)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! It is wonderful to hear that you've been following this story for some time - it has been rewritten to an extent since the old days on fanfiction-dot-net, but I keep coming back to this story, again and again, to continue writing it. To hear that you've enjoyed it this much is fantastic. I can't thank you enough for the compliments!

You have the story in a nutshell with that list of genres - it's one of those stories in which the author writes what they themselves would love to read: an Indiana Jones style tale with a female protagonist, but without the whole "tomb raider" association. I'm starting to add more occult and mystical elements too, playing with Ancient Egyptian mythology and the way that it revived in the late-19th and early-20th centuries. All of these things make me want to go on writing, and it means a lot that you enjoy this combination of genres. :D

Moody slips into the story in an exciting way because, like you said, he seems like a minor character, but he insinuates himself into the story and into Helen's life. I don't want to reveal more at the moment because their partnership does become central to the plot - they can only succeed by pooling their resources and skills, and of course by learning to trust each other. What's interesting about writing Moody is that he becomes more of a chameleon as I go on - only in the chapter I'm writing now does he start to reveal more of himself.

Thank you again for this review - I can only hope that the future chapters of this story continue be enjoyable. :)


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