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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hiii! Finally here! And rather sad; I hadnít realized this was my last chapter to review! But Iíve added it to my favorites so I can keep up, yay!

I did not except Narcissa! This is exciting! And Sirius! See, this is why I donít leave running reviews. I canít get a single coherent thing out.

Iím really curious as to not only Narcissa offering to help, but what she knows and how she knows it. I love being curious, itís such an exciting thing. You do mystery very well, you know. Setting up the scene for delivering the characters worked really well for this, especially considering just who you delivered.

This was such a packed chapter! So many characters and I loved it! The scene with Severus was both intense and sneaky. I canít help but be certain he set all that up with what he said. He knew James would defend Lily and then see him doing it and ugh. Slimy thing.

Back tracking to the section where James gets the letter; I loved Siriusís impatient nature. That is so true with my head canon and it just made me happy to see it play out in the story. I canít imagine him being a joy to be around when heís like that, haha!

Then Jamesís determination during the meeting was perfect. You really bring out his bet qualities well. And I really think that Albus was quite proud of that quality. Now I just want to hug everyone.

I think you keep a story moving really well. You know when to slow down and let the scene play out, and then when itís appropriate to bypass a few things and get us to the next thing of importance. Itís something that I think a lot of people struggle with, but you donít seem to at all!

Awesome chapter, and I do hope you update soon ♥

Jami

Author's Response: Jami! I swear I thought I responded to this ages ago, turns out I hadn't...yeah *hides*

I didn't expect Narcissa either, but then the idea came to me and she's far too fun to write to not include her :P And your review is coherent, don't worry ;) I'm going to be honest with you, the only reason I think I do mystery well is because I have no clue what's going to happen, therefore the reader has no clue either... I've changed the plot line and who's going to die and such about 10 times so far :P

I hate Snape. I wanted to show James still has that rashness and fierce protectiveness over Lily even though it's mellowed over the years. Of course, Lily didn't see James trying not to hurt Snape which is sad :(

Sirius is impatient and impulsive, and I had to channel my inner child when I was writing that, but it was fun to write :P It's what makes him him, y'know, and if I didn't include that he wouldn't be the same Sirius that everyone loves.

HUG THEM ALL! Determined and stubborn are definitely qualities I'd stick to James, he's going to see this thing through to the end. It's also part of the reason why I chose him to be the protagonist rather than Lily as I originally planned.

I hate slow stories. It really irritates me when I'm reading a book and I have to trudge through the beginning, but I also hate stories that don't develop the characters, so I had to balance between the two. I still have a few more characters to introduce properly, such as the girls, but keeping the plot moving is important too!

Thanks so much for the awesome review Jami!


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