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Review:teh tarik says:
I haven't read Over the Edge, but the summary of your story really intrigued me and I'm hoping that I'll be able to follow it even if it is a sequel :)

So, this is an absolutely wonderful start. Gah! Your writing is just so fluid; there's a lovely and very organic blend of description of the external setting with Rose's introspective thoughts and feelings.There is a fine mixture of tones, exterior calm but with unsettling hints shot through the narrative e.g. the nightmare, and how the both of them are running from the law, all the places they've been melting together in a haze of memory...it's all beautifully done. There's little action in this chapter, and yet it's utterly gripping and there's a very foreboding feel to it, like tension is building up slowly, going to breach the little paradise Rose and Krum (I think) are currently inhabiting.

And you have some lovely descriptions as well: Everything on the island was the same temperature. The air. The ocean. Even her own body. Most accurate description of the tropics, ever! At least I'm assuming they're in somewhere with a balmy tropical climate.

Anyway, this is a rather short review but I've enjoyed this so much. Really wonderfully written and I'll be looking forward to updates :D

-teh

Author's Response: Hi, teh. Thank you so much for being my first review!

I'm so glad you thought the chapter flowed well. This is a little more dreamy and detail-oriented than I usually write, but since it's an opening chapter, I'm hoping I can get away with it being a little more abstract and brooding. The details of the story will unfold slowly, but my goal here was definitely to set the feeling that all is not well in paradise.

Yes, it's the tropics for sure! I'm a northern dweller myself most of the year but I remember distinctly the first time I stepped in the ocean and found it wasn't cold!

Thank you so much for stopping by, and again for being my first review. I'm so glad you liked the chapter and hope you'll be so inclined to stop by again once I've posted a few more :)


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