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Review:Jchrissy says:
First of all, I'm so happy you liked my suggestions! Although I didn't do much other than tweak your already awesome ideas!

I love the way you slow this chapter down and really turn it into an introspective one. I love those kinds in general, but you had such an awesome combination of Eleanor doing things but stuck in her own head. I think everyone can identify with not being able to focus on what we need to be because something big going on in life. Can we understand feeling like one of your friends may be dead? Probably not, but Eleanor really can't either. And I love that. She's trying so hard to ignore it, but she can't. She never thought she'd have to deal with something like this and I just love it.

You really played into her trying to go about her work day (more on that in a second) and not being able to. I think a lot of authors have trouble with first person because they either spend too much time inside the character, or too much trying to show us the world outside the character, but you found a perfect mixture.

Now back to Eleanor's work day. So many people have something like this (training to be this or that) then never include it! The character is never actually doing it! But you completely showed us that training to be a Healer IS part of Eleanor's life, and a large one. We got to see the kinds of things she does (or is supposed to do when she's able to focus).

Then getting to see the state the rest of the wizarding world is in... it's so sad :(.

But we got cheered up by Amelia! Her and Eleanor make such a good combination. You've really given the two of them different personalities - another thing I love. But you've left me hanging over here wondering if Bertram is okay! You're going to need to speed up on that next chapter, missy ;)

Sorry I don't have time for a longer review. I have family visiting but wanted to stop by and tell you how much I adored this chapter. You're making Eleanor so realistic, I just want to hug her.

Can't wait for the next ♥

Author's Response: Hey dear! Sorry it's taken me forever to respond! I've gotten so far behind on my responses that i think it chased me away from doing any!

I loved your suggestions! They really helped smooth the chapter out and make it seem a little more coherent!

Gah! Your review is so nice! I love first person a lot simply because you can get really close to the character and get a chance to see the world from another person's perspective. I'm really pleased that there is a mixture of action and mind stuff though because i always feel I her too much in the mind which can get boring.

Yah, i've noticed that too and i find it interesting to see their day to day life. Which includes more mundane things like work and isn't exciting like going on a dragon ride or spending time being witty in a pub with mates. Or whatever. I think i'm attracted to stories that are day to day life stuff. I think some find it boring but i think it makes me feel really close to the characters in way.

I love writing Amelia. I don't know why but she's a joy to put into the story and i don't really have any firm ideas of who she is but i find that she's one of the easiest to write as she just comes and does her thing on the page. I'm glad that she compliments Eleanor and they work well because she's such a floaty character in my head i fear that she doesn't come across well on the page.

Thanks so much Jami for your lovely review! I'm working on the 6th chapter but i got distracted on starting another WIP (bad idea zayne, i know!!) but it's my next project and i'm about halfway done!! :P


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