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Review:DancingMooncalf says:
Oh I adore this story! Really, it's great. The flow is good, a nice pace so it does not get boring and it's still quite detailed.

I loved the bantering between Ellie and Al. I'm always a fan of bantering.
I like how you gave Ellie a git but don't make it too prominent yet. It's keeps the suspeance in the story.

I bet that gift is going to be usefull in the story to come. I'm curious where this is going. though I read some clue to that in the summary of course :)

This is going to be a great adventure I'm sure. You write it well.
If I can be so bold I would suggest to keep the romance off for a bit and first concertrate on the adventure. That will keep up the suspence, I think. (only a tip, don't take me to serious and go your own way...)

I love how you characterised Rose, with her fierce energy and her love for books. I wonder where she got the Devination side from... can't be her parents.
Ellie seems like a perfect match for her, indeed. I get that they are friends.

Keep up this great story and please feel free to request for the next chapter!

Maya

Author's Response: Hello, and thanks for taking the time to review!

I'm glad to hear you're enjoying it so far! Pacing's a bit of an issue with me, so it's good to hear that you think it's cool.

And the gift is gonna come in handy, for sure! And yeah, dead giveaway in the summary!

Thanks for the suggestion! I'm not exactly sure how or when I'm going to introduce the romance, but I don't want it to become the focus of the story, so it shouldn't be happening too soon!

Rose is fun to write, simply because she's one of my more normal characters. And perhaps I shall reveal her reasons for being a believer later on! And yeah, they balance each other out well, although, there's no way to determine whether two people are going to be friends!

And I shall definitely be re-requesting!


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