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Review:DancingMooncalf says:
Hey Aphoride, here is the review you requested:

You start in such a lovely, almost poetic manner. You really have a way with your words. Itís almost like reading literature, really.
Like all literary works the first few lines made me feel like itís far to complicated a story for me, but when I bravely read on it turns out you, as the author, helped me out. Painting the scenes with a very detailed brush.

Iíve always been one to read fast stories, that jump around a bit and have a lot of conversations. Yours it the opposite, but I like it a lot!
Once it read the first 100 words I found I could not stop. Breathlessly I had to read 'till the end of the chapter. Stopping only to write my thoughts about it, so I would not forget them.

A simple Ďwowí would not be sufficient to describe your talent. I think itís amazing!
I canít wait to read the next chapter... I will and leave a review to that as well if you want. Tell me what you want me to look at and I will gladly do it!

Itís very obvious there is this tension between those two men. I think you captured Gellertís nature pretty well. The thing is, unless maybe you are Lord Voldemort, there is always two sides to people. You make it clear what his reasons for this war are. His longing for power, for a magical utopia, thatís what drives him.
Why are some people so hungry for power? How you fall into thinking Ďthe greater goodí will justify slaying innocent people?

As for Dumbledore, he does sound like the Dumbledore we know. I always wonder why he did not do anything against Gellert earlier. He could have beaten him before all those deaths. That could be a thought to consider, if you werenít already. In the end he did not go for power, but he has the want for it somewhere in his mind. Hidden under disapproval and the knowledge that he canít handle it if he were to get it.

Iím falling into philosophies now... which is easy for me to do, but I donít know if you want to read all that.

Anyway, overall Iím impressed by this story, to be honest I never gave much thought to Gellert and Albus until now and it got me thinking a great deal. I like that!

As I said, if you want me to read the next chapter Iíll gladly do it. Feel free to request!

Thanks for such an amazing read, it made my Saturday morning sitting on the couch with a cold a lot better!

Maya


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