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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi there! Here for chapter two!

I have to say that I'm impressed with how Rose is taking this. I couldn't help but love her disgust of the first garment Scorpius had suggested. It's bed enough she doesn't have her own clothes to wear, and probably looks like a wreck. Then to add what sounded like a terribly ugly dress to the mix... I don't think I'd have taken too kindly to that offer either :P

I really enjoyed the joking banter between them in this first section. I especially loved the Scorpius didn't know what was wrong with the outfit. He wouldn't. Men.

The transition from her cleaning up in the shower to hiding behind the sofa was done really well. You moved us along without it feeling rushed, and Rose for go explore her strength a bit. I loved that she'd thought about being one of the monsters from the horror girls.

Awe i loved how concerned Hermione is. And tying back into Ron's little escaped with the car so many years ago was so creative!!

This chapter was really entertaining! And it moved the plot long nicely! The only thing I'd suggest is reformatting your dialogue so that each new speaker starts with its own paragraph.

Lovely chapter!

Jami

Author's Response: This is such a lovely review - thank you very much for stopping by! I'm glad you disapproved of Scorpius' taste as well...and mostly because of the fact of men ;) I'm glad you thought it went smoothly because I was a bit worried whether I'd rushed it a long a bit too fast. Thanks for the handy tip on dialogue too - I hadn't a clue how to format it! :D Thanks so much for a lovely long sweet review, you're awesome!!
~ Sophie x


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