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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey! Sorry it took me so long to get back here - real life has gotten a little hectic.

Anyway, it's nice to see that Flick is settling it (sort of) and getting back into the swing of things (with some interesting incidents along the way) at Hogwarts. However, all I could think in this chapter was "How on earth could she leave her children behind?" I'd be freaking out if I were Flick, constantly flooing Ria, writing letters and trying to get in contact, so I hope we see some more of this panic to see her children coming out in later chapters.

Oooh, Hattie really is horrible, isn't she? Why on earth did Albus start going out with her? Clearly, he is crazy. But I hope Flick doesn't let Hattie drive her into insanity, because she's so much better than that. And I like the fact that Dom always sticks up for her. It seems like the two of them are very good friends and I really hope Flick starts letting her, as well as her other friends (and especially Albus) in soon. I don't want her to be all alone!

I noticed, at the start in particular several spelling and grammar mistakes that were a little distracting, so I'd suggest a quick re-read to get rid of those.

Another thing I liked about this chapter was the fact that those boys were drooling over Victoire...and I love the way Dom tried to protect her sister, which just resulted in Victoire yelling at her. That definitely seemed very sisterly. And VERY teenage boy, too.

Flick's timetable! Man, would I love to have three free periods in one day. Maybe I'd actually get some homework done then...although somehow, I doubt it.

Overall, nice chapter!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Heya,

Don't worry about it, it's fine.

I think Flick was relativly calm as it was only the first night/day away from them but she does go into panic mode a bit later on.

Yep, Hattie is a piece of work. Al must be crazy, but somehow he tries to see a good side in everyone.

We'll see, Flick might eventually tell them but any idea who she would tell first??? Flick won't be alone ;)

I'll be sure to re-read and change them!!

Dom and Vic are close, but they're not as close as Flick and Ria. Even though Vic is older Dom still feels the need to protect her, they are family after all. Teenage boys, pretty much all of them have one thing on their mind except for the odd few.

Same here, but then again I never do. I always end up distracted by something else.

Thanks once again!!!

-Potterfan310
Soph xx


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