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Review:TheHouseElf says:
Guess what Jami? It's review time again!

I love the opening sentence. You're incorporating the wizarding world and wizardisms (Yes, I just made that up :P) into your story which sometimes can be left out...which is irritating, especially if that story is set at Hogwarts, grr. However, I'm just going to do a bit of Brit picking with you dear :D The British education system isn't based on credits, it's just based on exam and coursework (though there isn't any coursework at Hogwarts and it's rare now) grades, just as a heads up :D

I loved the way Lily was thinking about lycanthropy and the dramatic irony you created, you just want to shout at her to talk to Remus :P But I know exactly how Lily feels when James interrupts her flow, it's really annoying whenever that happens. I feel her pain, curse you James!

I loved how James went to talk to Lily about becoming captain, that was so sweet, even if he did want to schedule a party :P

I also loved the characterisation and the development of the Marauders. I read your blog about relationship types and yes, those people leaving reviews about the friendship between the four boys are right. They're pretty much carefree at the moment and I'd love to see how that changes as the war drags on :D

Belle's absolutely amazing, she reminds me a bit of Fleur, but she has that rebellious streak- to be honest, I think if I were a wizard then my essays would be, erm, rushed? I liked how you described her and Sirius as thunder and lightning, it just seems to fit y'know? Their strong personalities are just storm-like, it was a description that I loved in Casualties of War too ;)

I also loved that little snippet of Lily's childhood, that was so sad :( Are you purposely trying to make me cry woman? :P

And oh gosh, Remus! Again with the dramatic irony Jami, I just want to squish the guy and tell him that the little boy will be alright ;)

Yay, Bellatrix! I was wondering when she'd come in, yes :D Ooh, Lily did handle her brilliantly, the perfect voice of authority, wasn't she? Then again, I suppose she doesn't really understand how far Bellatrix will go for her master :P

I liked the party- Gryffindor parties are the best, aren't they?- and the introduction of Alrek, he seems to me like he's going to be stirring up a bit of trouble, unintentionally of course :P

Lovely chapter Jami!

Author's Response: Ahh you spoil me, you do!

Ooh Wizardisms, that's a good one. You wouldn't by any chance be related to Shakespeare with you ability to create words, would you? :P

I get irritated too when school stuff is left out! Oh! Thank you for pointing that out about the school system not being based no credits! I'll have to go change that! Also, I never mind when Brit picking occurs, so don't ever feel bad about pointing anything out!

Belle is such a fun character to write. There's a lot more to her than meets the eye, but it's sometime until you figure that all out :P.

Haha I'm not trying to make you cry, I'm not!B But those Lily childhood snippets are a reoccurring thing :)!

Bellatrix! I think you're right. If Lily would have known at this point how crazy Bellatrix is, she may have been a bit more careful.

Alrek... he's an interesting character. Keep an eye on that one :P

Thank you again so much for your lovely reviews! You're making my day. And currently i have my in laws visiting and staying in MY APARTMENT with me, so making my day is NOT easy to do :P



Jami


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