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Wow. I really admire the creativity it took to come up with this. I'm not normally one for AU stories, but you took this in such an interesting direction and you were so thorough and original in your plot that it really pulled me in.
I really like this darker side to Harry Potter that you've created. Having survived so much death and heartbreak and evil, it seems only natural that a part of it would rub off on him. The world that he lives in seems fairly dark, as well. Death Eaters openly attacking, only to be repelled or captured by Harry's Aurors... it has the feeling of an open war. The internal struggle that you gave Harry -- the conflict between the hero that he is expected to be and the angry, wounded man that he is on the inside -- was beautifully done.
Sirius is still alive! I really love that decision. If you're going to take a story in the AU direction, you might as well give new life to one of the most interesting, entertaining characters who died in the books.
Let's see, what else? I really loved the penseive scene. Devlin seems like such a precocious, lively, wonderful little boy. And his baby magic, the act of creating all the lilies... he really does understand what makes people happy and how to touch them. The opening scene with Voldemort and Devlin made my skin crawl. You did a great job of capturing the dry menace and insidious cruelty of the Dark Lord as it would be perceived by a frightened, injured little boy. I felt so awful for Devlin, but at the same time his strength and his faith in his own magic was inspiring.
Kudos for really good writing and great editing! The entire chapter flowed really nicely and nothing sounded awkward or forced. I only saw one typo:
"My wand is against you neck," Harry said, deadly, when the Death Eater dared to try and move away. - against your neck
All in all, you did a fabulous job with this!
Author's Response: Eee! Would it sound too fan-girlish if I said I actually squealed when I saw your username? I'm really not the fan-girl sort of girl, after all. But I am a huge fan of your Remus/Tonks transformation fanfic. :D So yeah, I squealed when I saw YOU liked my story! Woot!
This story just came to me, honestly. I began to write it when it was popular to write James-was-the-son-of-Voldemort fanfics (yeah, WAY back then) and decided I wanted the connection but didn't find it believable through James, or Lily. It seemed plausible, however, that Voldemort might have taken part in the 'fun' when he was younger. Hence Alexandra.
I've worked hard on being able to write Harry this way and it's really only in this rewrite of the story (this is the 3rd one), that I feel I have a grasp on him. I turned the story upside down in this rewrite and I think it is really paying off. Starting with the torture scene was a big jump and something I wasn't certain of, but I felt we needed to see this - how Devlin lost who he was, quickly see who he had been, and then rapidly progress to seeing who he is now (which happens in the next chapter). I felt it was needed to understand Devlin as much Harry.
Sorry for all the gushing. Thanks so much for the review!