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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review (finally). Sorry for the extremely long wait!

I am liking the story so far. The way the plot is developing seems good. It was nice to see Mikaela interact with her future husband's parents today, it was all awkward and stuff, and thus realistic. I also loved the outburst she had, I think it was justified since so much was happening so fast that she needed to let it all out, so good job.

The structure of the chapter is a little awkward though. The short clipped sentences were good in the beginning as they show thought-process but since you wrote like that throughout, the flow wasn't very smooth. I'd suggest to use normal length sentences and more short paragraphs to ease the flow. It was a little hard to follow also, because of all the disjointed sentences, it felt like the thoughts were scattered all over the place. I'd suggest to re-read and edit this chapter and polish it to make it flow better and also make it more organised. Your grammar is also a little off in places.

My recommendation would be to get a beta who can help you in improving the writing because as a reviewer, I can't point out everything.

Apart from that, this was nice though. I liked the way it ended and the little details you gave of Mikaela and her life. The characterisations were also nicely done.

All in all, good work, but can be improved. Keep writing!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Heyy yes I did have a beta
I will update this very soon dont worry
and thankyou soo much xx
Em


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