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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi lovely! First of all, I love that the talking Patronus is still being used. Itís one of my favorite little things in the series. They way he springs into action and already starts doing what needs to happen to present the case, and not allowing thing like a growing tummy get in his way really shows what an awesome Auror he makes. Itís a small detail, but speaks volumes about his character.

Scorpius totally wants to analyze what that might mean, even if he isnít at that moment. Regarding him regretting letting her hand go, that is. I really like that youíre continuing to build up the Ďwork come firstí personality side of him. I also really like the remark about the Weasley women keeping half their closets in their purses, haha!

Oh my gosh Iím pausing right now just to say that I LOVE how intense this all is. I absolutely underestimated the Peverell Society and hoped their letter to Rose had some how been a happy coincidence. I should know never to underestimate anything in these mystery stories!

Oh my gosh the entire ending to this chapter was perfect. Your writing really, really shines when you get into the investigative details. Having the joke shop as the head quarters for the Order, and having the Order now being a team of elite members of the department is all just so awesome. Iíve never seen that done, but I absolutely love it. I think that having something like that to have as many ears and eyes around, all of them ready to react if needed, is such an awesome idea. If Voldemort would have better eyes on him he may have never gotten as powerful as he did, and yeah. I was just really impressed with the creativity in this whole chapter.

Back to the way you write the investigative side of things -- all their planning and nailing down what needed to be done. I just loved it. I absolutely ate those details up, especially about talking to the goblins because someone had to be financing the operations. It was so logical, but nothing Iíd ever have thought to do.

This chapter was really awesome, mídear! canít wait for the next!

Author's Response: Hello my lovely Jami! This review made me smile so much, my cheeks hurt!

Scorpius as I see him is the kind of guy that doesn't stop to analyze. He just does. In my mind, he is totally different from Draco, who waited to be told what to do and received help. And Scorpius is trying to distance himself from being seen as Draco.

I'm so happy you liked the Order bit. In the original draft of this chapter there wasn't much dialogue in the last part but it felt kind of rushed so I slowed it down a little. I'm glad to see it was a good idea!

Thank you again for all the lovely comments! You have no idea how much they mean to me!


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