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Review:nott theodore says:
Hello!

I liked this chapter. It was nice to see that Lucy gets on with Al (he's one of my favourite characters) and that they have a close relationship. I'm glad she has someone to look after her when things go wrong!

I noticed a few spelling and grammatical errors in this chapter. You say 'good riddens' when it should be 'good riddance' and a few times you slip into past tense when the majority of the story was in present tense, so you just need to check for little inconsistencies like that. It wasn't enough to affect the flow of the chapter, though.

I liked the longer scenes in this chapter because they gave us a bit more detail and insight into the characters and the plot. Also, I've never seen a story where someone has been re-sorted so I'm interested to see what Lucy makes of her new start.

Don't get discouraged by a lack of reviews, because a lot of people don't leave them when they read a story - it doesn't mean people aren't reading and enjoying what you write! But since I've left you three reviews, hopefully that's enough for you to carry on writing. I'll look forward to the next chapter!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: Thanks for another great review! True I am terrible at spelling and because I want to just pour my ideas out, I often go into different tenses, sorry!

The next chapter is 100% present tense so I hope you enjoy it!


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