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Review:800 words of heaven says:

I'm so sorry I can't leave a really long and detailed review, which is what I usually do, especially when the chapters are a bit longer, just because there's so much about which to talk.

I haven't actually read many AUs (if any at all) and I like the premise of this one. Right now, Devlin does sound a bit Mary Sue to be true, but this is just the first chapter and you haven't really had a chance to develop his character fully. If you're trying to portray him a bit like Voldemort when he was a kid, then his apparent Mary Sue-ness makes sense right now.

Harry is very different from canon. I'm a stickler for canon, but I must say, I like your take on him. He's older, wiser, and far more bitter than what I usually see him portrayed. It makes sense in some aspects, and I'm looking forward to the way you'll explore it further.

The plot for this story also seems quite original and fresh, and has just a touch of Moffat's Doctor Who, which bodes interesting for this story. I'm excited to see where this'll go!

PS: So glad that Sirius isn't dead. I sincerely hope you don't kill him.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! This chapter is actually awaiting an update right now, which will help with the Mary-Sueness, I hope. It will change him from four to six.
I am going for a bit of a Tomish thing, glad you were able to pick up on that.
Thanks for the compliment about Harry and I hope you'll give him a chance - cannon Harry does shine through a bit. :)

I've never actually watched Doctor Who but you're not the first one to say something along those lines and it's really making me consider delving into Doctor Who... although the last thing I need is another story in my head ;)

No Sirius killing, promise!

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