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Review:ShadowRose says:
ShadowRose here from the forums, with your requested review!

Wow. Just... wow. This is such an amazing idea and I'm excited to see where it goes.

Rosenelle is definitely my favorite character of the three. You show so much of her character just through her interactions with her mother, and even more so with her interactions with James. You can really feel the tension between them. Plus, she's some sort of criminal? I love it.

Roseanna's parents are very well portrayed, as the high-class couple who basically only looks out for themselves and their reputation. It also serves to show what kind of life she led before now.

I also love when she's leaving the house, and keeps seeing the things that remind her of her childhood. It just increases the reader's sympathy for her, because you watch her leave behind everything she ever had.

As far as her characterization, you can definitely see how little she trusts people, as shown by the immediate conclusions she jumps to when Louis leaves the room.

As for your final character, who lacks a first name if I'm not mistaken, she's very different from any other characters you really see in fanfiction. First, she's a Seer, she's an Arithmancer, and she went to school in Greece. Also, someone's trying to kill her. Once again, an amazing and totally unique character.

Okay, I have just a few CCs: "But he wasn't the best, no off course not." Should that be "of" instead of "off"? Also "I don't have to plague." Did you mean "the plague"? Finally, "non-word spell" should be "non-verbal spell."

Also, Muffliato wouldn't silence her. What the spell does it fill the person's ears with white noise so they can't overhear a conversation. I believe Silencio is te spell you're looking for.

Overall, GREAT start to this story, and please re-request when you have more chapters!

-ShadowRose

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review! Means a lot =)

Alright so thank you for pointing out the mistakes. I thought I read it over but obviously I miss stuff all the time so thanks!

Im really glad you liked the characters! The final characters dont have names yet but they will soon so no biggie :P It was on purpose though ahah.

Im happy you think they are unique! Thanks for the compliments =)


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