Sorry I'm so late on getting your review done...
Right from the first line, your Tonks makes sense. I've never imagined her to be self-assured and assertive about the reasons she'd be a part of the order, so wondering why she's there is perfectly coherent with my idea of her.
I like that you've made Tonks and Charlie just friends, because they're paired in a lot of fics, and I just can't imagine them as such, for some reason. Of course he'd look like he was going to faint, who wouldn't at such news?
I didn't even really feel the pain of the impact. Falling over was such a common occurrence for me, that it seemed as if my body had become resilient to the pain of it all.
As well as having appalling balance, I also had a terrible sense of direction, so I wasn't even sure if I was going the right way. I would have used a locator spell, but given how crowded muggle London is with all the kids on school holidays, I would be breaking the Statue of Secrecy by doing so. Getting called to report to the Ministry for that, would be pretty embarrassing, to say the least.
Kingsley would have a field day if that happened. He's supposed to be my boss, but he's more like an older brother in reality, and spends most of the time teasing me. He's such a lovely person, Kingsley.
In just a few lines, you've got so much expressed: the relationship with Kingsley, that is so fitting with what we know from cannon, Tonks' legendary clumsiness -- for the record, it's very well done, and not just 'oh let's give her a fault and make her clumsy' Twilight-clumsiness.
Haha, the jab at pureblood family ties with cousins and second cousins everywhere! It's actually something I can identify to easily, because I have twenty something direct cousins and something nearing a hundred second cousins on both sides of the family, so yeah, Tonks' confusion really made me laugh!
FIRST MEETING WITH REMUS! Of course she'd fall on top of him, of course. I liked the inclusion of Andromeda as well.
Sirius, you irritating human being. Stop seeing things where they're not.
Your portrayal of Moody is very well done, I'm just slightly surprised that he isn't more snappy, though of course snappy!Moody wasn't really Moody, was it?
Just one tiny thing. At the end, Sirius says 'It was nice meeting you' but hasn't he said a couple of paragraphs previously that he'd already seen Tonks as a toddler? Nothing big, just me being picky...
Overall, I think this was a great first chapter, and very accurate in all your characterisations :)
Author's Response: Hi there, and don't worry about how long it took, at least you did it, I've had some swaps where people don't review back *grumbles in corner*.
I'm glad that you liked the reasoning about why Tonks was there, she never seemed that confident to me either, so it was nice to see that you thought the same.
I've never actually read any stories with Tonks and Charlie paired together, but I just thought it would be natural that they were friends!
Haha I'm glad that you liked those few lines. Tonks' clumsiness is a cute one, not Bella clumsy which is just annoying quite frankly!
I thought it would be fun to include the pureblood link, as I'm with you two on this, I have far too many relatives to know who they all are!
Sirius is just trying to play cupid I think ;) Even if it is in a very in-direct way!
I'm glad that you liked Moody, he's such a hard character to write because in the book he featured in the most, it wasn't even him!
I guess with that line from Sirius it was just he never really knew her before, so this is his chance at getting to know her properly!
Thanks for the review,