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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! This was such a sweet little story! I’m a sucker for the ‘we’re having a baby’ ones, and I love that in this it was unexpected because of past medical history. At first I was going to be like, come on Rose, are you really that surprised? But then when she mentioned that she *can’t* have children because she was told she has a hostile uterus, I got all warm and fuzzy. Because now you have a tiny little bean growing in you! (Rose does, not YOU :P).

I loved Rose insisting that Scorpius not come in during the first section. I think we’ve all been like that, where we feel so awful and are sure we *look* even worse. Blah. Poor thing.

I loved the playful banter. Well, playful on Scorpius's side. I don’t think Rose was playing all that much... haha. And the comment he made to her about no longer being able to use ‘Malfoy’ as an insult was adorable. I love the idea of Rose being a Malfoy. It’s so ironic. Her and Lily are both two that I’d ship whole heartedly with Scorpius, because how much more fun can it be than to imagine either Harry or Ron connected to Draco? Hehe.

When Scorpius brought up calling Hermione - oh my gosh. That was so much fun. That felt like such a realistic thing to say and it just made me giggle. You gave Scorpius such an easy going and caring personality in this; I just want to hug him.

Your dialogue had a few problems with punctuation. Just the small period/comma issue.

Like here
---“It was in January.” I tell her and glance at Scorpius, who is looking at me with wide eyes. 

Should be:

--- “It was in January,” I tell her. You want the comma after January because -- I tell her and she glances at Scorpius, who is looking at me with wide eyes -- Isn’t an independent clause. It depends on your dialogue to tie it together. The best thing to do with that one to make it from being too over loaded with commas would probably be to rearrange it like this:

--- “It was in January,” I tell her. She glances at Scorpius, who is looking at me with wide eyes.

Basically anytime whatever follows the dialogue can’t stand alone, you need the comma. Unless it’s a question mark, in that case you just do the lowercase. But you have a few of those in this and they looked perfect :).

I loved, loved, LOVED their joy by the end of this. It would be so crazy to be told you have something that you never thought you would, and I just felt so happy for them. I think you captured their excitement really well. I especially love that Rose was almost in denial at first, like she didn’t want to get her hopes up.

This was such a sweet one shot, Ral! I loved reading it!

Author's Response: I have taken forever to reply to this! Urgh! I am a horrible, horrible person!

Your review just made me so happy, you have no idea! I wanted to do the whole, "c'mon, of course she's having a baby" and then have her not being able to! I love being unpredictable! *evil laugh*

I am so glad you enjoyed their relationship and their interactions. I know when I'm sick and feel all icky I'm very mean. Meaner than usual that is.

I have some issues with the commas at times, since in my native language we don't do it like that. It's a whole different punctuation system that we'll discuss via PM if you want.

Thank you so much once more for the lovely review and all of your support! *hugs* I Tinky Winky you! :D (couldn't help myself)


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