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Review:DumbledoresArmyOfOne says:
Hey Amanda,
Gillyweed again, reviewing partly for the review exchange and partly because this is an awesome story :D
I really love all the little details you put into your writing. Everything seems to have been created with such care, and because of that it adds a whole facet of realism to your writing. It's not just: the girls were found frolicking in the fountain, because you put in all the little tidbits that really make a story excellent instead of just good.

I really loved the memorial fountain idea... i don't know, it seems like a neat bit of wizard history to stick in there.
(also loving the DW reference ;)

As in the last chapter, you do a fantastic job of revealing and developing characters through action and dialogue as opposed to description. This makes your writing extremely readable and engaging.

I love the relationship between Al and Lily, though we don't see much between him and James or Rose, I assume that will come with time.

Another lovely chapter!
~Gill

Author's Response: Hi Gill! The February review exchange is actually over, since it ends at the end of the month, but it was very kind of you to come back for another chapter :)

Thanks! I do love my details, and I had fun recounting the events of the "frolicking incident" in a courtroom setting. It's great that you enjoyed seeing a bit of history show up with the fountain and also the Tardises show up in George's satellite shop :)

I am a big fan of "show, not tell." I get very annoyed when I read stories where people are like, "Here's my OC. She has brown hair and blue eyes and hates Transfiguration and is in love with James Potter." I much prefer stories where you slowly get to know the character as you follow the plot of the story, rather than getting all of it dumped on you at once. It's great that you enjoyed seeing that here.

If you decide to keep reading--and of course I hope you do--you'll get to see a little more about how Albus feels about Rose. James only plays a small part in this story, but I won't promise that he isn't discussed more later on.

Thanks for your very kind review!

-Amanda


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