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Review:ShadowRose says:
I'm back again with your requested review!

I like how you're able to fluidly switch from the drama of last chapter to Sirius not knowing what was going on. It takes a lot of work to intentionally make a character oblivious, when you're clearly not.

One little stylistic comment: you tend to use the word "as" a lot, especially in this chapter. Maybe try breaking it up with some other words every now and then?

I feel like the pool of blood should have caused more panic in both Maia and Sirius. But then again, when you live in a magical castle, you never really do know what to expect when you turn a corner, do you?

It's nice to finally hear the full story of Thalia's parents. I like that you've kind of kept it more secretive until now, because then it builds up the drama.

I love how you use this to draw even more similarities between Thalia and Sirius. Both of them just have these horrible home lives.

They're slowly getting closer - by the way, I like that the progression into friendship and relationship and what not is more gradual, because that's usually how it works in real life. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Overall, great chapter! :)

-ShadowRose

Author's Response: Hello again!

Haha I'm glad that you liked Sirius being oblivious, it was fun to make him not know what was going on for once!

Yes I know I have a thing for 'as', this chapter is going to be edited sometime soon, so I'll get rid of them! And add in more of an impact when they see the blood.

I'm glad that you liked learning more about her parents, I couldn't reveal it all at once, as it would just ruin the fun! Yes they do have horrible home lives, at least Thalia had a nice one when her Dad was alive :)

They becoming close friends, and it's such fun to do, soI'm glad that you liked it!

Thanks for another great review,

-Kiana :D

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