I can safely say Iím not happy about how itís taking me to get through This Longing, but school likes to interfere with things :( But hey at least Iím here now :D
I felt rather sorry for poor old Grimm at the beginning of this chapter, he appeared so forlorn, you couldnít help but pity him. I almost couldnít believe it when he was contemplating brewing Amortentia, I just didnít expect to see such a rebellious side to him, and for love of all things, I guess thatís whatís making him act so out of character.
Was the Prince girl, Eileen Prince by any chance, as I figured the timings would be right?
It was interesting to see that Minerva was the more tolerant one of the two. Even though it was only acknowledging Tomís greeting, it still told us a lot about her character, and how she was more willing to tolerate those perceived as evil, than Grimm was.
I agree with Grimm Ďmisgivingsí does have a certain ring to it. It was nice, and rather brave of him to stand up for Minerva. Well he ought to, considering it was his fault that they had landed in this predicament, but still it showed that he developed and matured to recognise when the fault laid with him, and that he should own up to that fact.
I really liked Grimmís and Minervaís interactions with one another. They just seemed to be written so naturally, and you can sense the tension and chemistry between them both. They just seemed to hold some many feelings for one another, that I cannot even comprehend them all and Iím just an observer. Itís really well written though, as you can just imagine this happening, and thatís not often the case when romance is depicted in fan fiction.
Then the ending was wonderful, with the mention of Pax. I really hope that we get to learn more about their respective families as they both sound so intriguing and differing, and it will be interesting to see whether they shaped their characters or not!
Another excellent chapter, and hopefully Iíll be back sooner :D
Author's Response: Take your time! It's a long novel, and I don't know how long it's going to take me to write the next chapter - for some reason, I'm particularly slow in writing this story (probably because I don't want it to end :P). It's wonderful of you to read and review each chapter, though - thank you for taking the time to do so!
What I love about writing Grimm is that he's inconsistent and unpredictable, and it is his main weakness because it means that he can't commit to anything; it also leads him to make stupid mistakes and quick judgments. His emotional state is fragile and frequently changeable. Minerva is the stronger one of the two and will always be so - it creates a fascinating dynamic to write. It's something I also don't see much of in romance stories - it wouldn't be hard to switch their genders and end up with a more stereotypical romance.
The girl is Eileen Prince! She comes and goes in the story, so keep an eye out for her. :D
I'm so glad to hear that their relationship sounds natural and believable. It has helped that I created it for "The Fires Within", so I was able to work out the kinks there before moving onto this one. Yet there's also something about the two of them that just fits - maybe it's in the way that I constructed Grimm as the "equal and opposite" to Minerva. Whatever it is, it make me happy that you like it. ^_^
Thank you again! I hope that you enjoy the rest of the story!