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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! You’re my last review of the battle! But I do plan on continuing on :)

Anyway, to the chapter! First of all, I’m going to point out that I was pretty confused. Not about the apartment looking; I love the way you set that. You started the scene and let it sort of play out for a few sentences before showing exactly what was going on. That’s a tactic I really enjoy. But, and I very well may have just missed something so correct me if I did, I thought from the start that they *were* getting a place together.

I think because both dads were there, and they talked about their summer jobs not being enough to pay the rent... I totally just assumed they’d decided to get a place together. So that sort of took away from Al’s big question, and I went back and skimmed to see if I’d missed anything. Maybe letting us know very early on that their looking for an apartment for just Lexi and the baby could help? When Harry mentioned that they’re paying and stuff it just solidified my idea that they were paying for a place for the two of them together.but I may have just missed something :P

I do absolutely love the way that Al starts off by explaining what’s important about being there all the time. It was so honest and true. He would miss a lot, and she’d have to deal with a lot being by herself and pregnant. Then of course by herself with the baby. It’s almost guaranteed that they wouldn’t both hear the first word or see the first step... and you played into all that so well! And Lexi’s answer! Yay!!

I literally LOL’ed at the part where Theo asks her if she’s excited about not being alone for the idea of spending more of his money! hahahah! You’ve really built a lovely father daughter relationship ♥

And we did get to find out Ginny’s reaction! I feel better now :). I love that you had her telling Lexi after the emotional storm settled that she was welcome any time. We know how accepting the Potter’s are, and that just brought all sort of warm feels to me. I hope you continue this story past her pregnancy and when she has the baby because now i really want to see her and the little tyke over at the Potter’s house :P

You’ve really done such an awesome job with keeping Lexi’s emotions realistic but still pregnant. Their indecisiveness about the apartments was all leading up to this and ah! I’m so happy for them! It makes so much sense, though. No one wants to raise a baby with balconies and shared walls and no grass and awww ♥ it was just so very sweet.

I think that Al and Lexi make an incredibly unstoppable team, haha. Sure, Lexi has the sweet daddy’s girl thing going on, but Al clearly got his ability to rationalize through things from his father and uses that. Their dad’s never had a chance :P

Small think I just noticed - summer in ‘we’ve got our summer job salaries’ shouldn’t be capitalized :)

I loved that Theo’s offer came with stipulations. It reminded us that he still is the dad, and not a total push over ;).

This was such a sweet chapter, Sam! See you soon!

Jami

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