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Review:accioHPFF says:
Hi Debra!

This is a really nice first story, and I loved the fact that you based it around the Silver Trio, opposed to just Neville. The House Cup seems like so long ago now- I can't believe that I hadn't stumbled upon this sooner.

I think one of the main things I like about this story is that it COULD have been from one of the films. It's a part of the storyline that I've not really considered before, but that's what I love about this story. Yyou've taken an event and really made it come to life with this, so well done for that :)

I did notice a couple of issues in this with typos or slightly unnatural syntax, but it was pretty minor stuff and the general flow of the story was good. Those small mistakes are something that I beta would be able to clear up for you pretty easily.

Your characterisation of Ginny and Neville really stood out to me as well. The quarrel between Ginny and Neville was great in allowing you to show off her hot-headedness and his unwillingness. Great story, well done :)

-Scott

Author's Response: Scotty! I am so sorry it took me longer than a month to reply to this :( but I'm here now!

I love how the Silver Trio sounds. I never thought about them like that but you're right. In the absence of Harry, Ron and Hermione, they were the ones to take up the responsibility of keeping the school safe.

I'm so happy you liked my take on this little missing moment. I felt it was a big part of the book's storyline, so I decided to explore it further and see how it could have happened.

Characterization is definitely one of the most important aspects in a story for me, so I always pay special attention to it. I'm relieved that you found theirs an accurate one. I'm always very anxious about characterization, especially concerning characters that are pretty well established in the series like Neville and Luna.

I have edited part of the story in the lookout for typos and funky syntax since it's been pointed it out to me before and I'll be sure to finish it soon enough.

Thanks a million for stopping by! It warms my heart to hear from you *hug*


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