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Review:CambAngst says:
Wow! That was a barn-burner of a chapter, no pun intended. OK, maybe a small pun intended. But everything just exploded into the open and I loved every second of it.

I am SO curious to find out who the killer is. I've been sitting here, racking my brain, and I can't come up with any good possibilities. He obviously has a connection of some sort to Teddy. They have a past. They understand each other in some strange way. I'm thinking hard about the fire when Teddy was supposed to have died. Was it deliberately set? Teddy would have been so young then, maybe 12 or 13 years old. It's hard to imagine how he would have lived on the run for so long.

The serenity that Harry seemed to have in this chapter really added to the feeling of a crescendo. He's figured it all out. He knows what's going to happen at the party, and he can finally attend because the demons that have haunted him are about to be exorcised. It was a lovely thing, and I felt so happy for him, even though I strongly suspected that you had more surprises in store.

Harry's entrance to the party felt really tense and awkward, very appropriately so. I liked the way that you gradually brought his family back to him, a little at a time. When Teddy revealed himself, the whole scene collapsed in on the two of them for a little while. Harry didn't get all the answers he wanted, but he definitely got some closure. Then, when the Potter family was reunited, that was an awesome feeling. I was hoping Teddy would come down from the balcony to rejoin them, but it seems that he knows that the killer is lurking and he needs to keep his distance.

"Now is not the time, Harry," Teddy pointed out. "Tick tock, remember." - So he does know that something bad is about to happen. I'm glad that everyone realizes Teddy isn't the killer. That would have been bad.

The ending left a tight feeling in my chest. I'm pretty sure that Teddy made it out alive, but where is he? Why is he being so mysterious? And where is the killer? So many questions with only two short chapters left!

So I saw one small typo in this chapter, or maybe you'd call it more of a continuity problem:

Leaning against the dining room table, Harry watched the clock...

...Harry pushed himself away from the desk and made his way out of the house. - I'm wondering whether you meant to say "table" in that second sentence.

Otherwise, another beautifully crafted chapter! I love reviewing contests. I get to read so many awesome things!

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