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Review:DarknessIsMyOnlyFriend says:
Starting with a dream sequence can be tricky, but you nailed it! And that moment after a dream, where you try to tell yourself it's only a dream. Again you make her reactions very realistic, which makes it easier to relate to a character.

And I like how the healer kept the questions open en non-suggestive. That is how it's supposed to be and it shows your ability to stay as close to reality as possible with a story about witches.

The family interactions were very good described as well. When tragedy strikes people react in very different ways. I like how you handles the characters here. When Dominique lashes out about what happened the night Sirius was saved from the dementors, then retreats slightly to say Remus was a great man, just no longer a man that time of the month...emotions were implied more then blatantly said and it worked very well! And Harry not telling Teddy about that, seems very in character as well.

My reviews aren't as long as usual, but that's simply because I found little that I wanted to point out other than the fact I really like it so far! The flow of these two chapters is very good, unforced, genuine, real.

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing this chapter as well!

I was a bit wary of starting with a dream too, but I am happy to hear that you found it done well! I am pleased that you think Dom's reactions were realistic.

Really? I was so worried whether I got the healer scene right or not, so thank you for your comments, it's so good to know that you found it realistic.

I am glad you liked the family interactions, and liked the way I handled the characters. I wanted to show the emotions and yet not say them blatantly so its great that it worked. I always thought that Harry wouldn't tell the kids much about the "bad stuff" so yeah =)

I am so flattered that you liked this so far, and the flow seemed good to you. I am currently writing the third chapter so hope you like that too. Thanks a lot!


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