Hi Amanda! I meant to come back sooner, but school likes to keep me away, unfortunately! I am determined to catch up with this before you next update though!
So my book twin reappears with Marco Polo! It just makes me love Helena even more when I see that we have the same book taste, it seems as if I have an obsession with medieval books! It was interesting to see how her views towards her mother have begun to change, and have started to become bitterer. I really love the use of foreshadowing, as it’s not overtly obvious, which makes it even more effective in my opinion.
My sentiments towards the letter mirrored Helena’s. I thought it was a rather sweet portrayal of their relationship, because due to the time period they lived in, it was obviously going to be more formal than modern day relationships, but this spontaneity is just lovely, and it shows a more affectionate side to Venn, as though he had romantic thoughts about Helena, he never revealed them in actions, and I like this change to him.
I loved this line ‘Venn could not conceal his smile. This strange woman had an effect on him.” It just seemed to describe their relationship perfectly. Both of them are so odd in so many respects, that their oddness seems to balance one another out, and make them sort of normal together. Because here, they’re just two young people in love, not an aloof baron, and an intellectual woman.
I liked how you made them have differences as well. I can’t decide whether I liked Venn’s reaction to Helena talking about the wedding, or Helena’s reaction about the hint about children more. Both of those things are so important to one of them, while the other detests it! I liked how you made them closer, yet showed cracks in their relationship.
I adored the abundance of fluff! The kiss was so fitting, and perfectly done. You can just imagine Helena’s initial shock, then her deciding to give in. Then Rowena appearing at the end was so unexpected, and dread to think what her reaction will be to it!
Another excellent chapter, and I hope to be back soon!
Author's Response: Hi Kiana, nice to see you again :)
I'm happy to hear that you like the slow way I'm trying to build up the rift between Helena and Rowena. It's definitely going to get more intense as the story continues and Helena does more to defy Rowena's expectations.
Venn is beginning to break out of his shell around Helena. His actions have become slightly less erratic as he gets more comfortable with being romantic for her and really getting into the prince charming role. Like you mentioned, they're both a little unorthodox, and maybe they enjoy that about each other. Either way, Venn is beginning to enjoy spending time with his future bride.
Oh, yeah, can't have people be too perfect for one another, haha :) Like any couple, Venn and Helena disagree on some things, and the question is just how deep that runs, and what kind of consequences it might have for them.
Helena, like Venn, is beginning to embrace the opportunity to be impulsive, despite the bit of propriety inside screaming at her to hold back. She's caught up in a whirlwind romance, one that Rowena is clearly frightened by.
Thanks for your fantastic review!