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Review:adluvshp says:
Hello again! AditiDraco95 here with your requested review from the forums =)

Ah, I absolutely adored this chapter! I was pleased to see that you Mikaela calmed down considerably and accept the situation in the beginning after spending time with the Muggles. It would have been too "draggy" if she had continued with the anger and tantrums etc.

I liked the insight into her thoughts, the way she berated herself for not paying attention to dinners, and nicknaming Nic etc. It all added a humorous edge to the narrative yet it didn't detract from the main situation. Good job!

I absolutely loved the scene between Astoria and her. It was great to finally witness the mother-daughter bond between the two, and I was touched by Astoria's words. She was very motherly and explained to her daughter in an apt manner.

I also liked the little flashback about Astoria's first love, and about how she and Draco got married and yet managed to find "love" in a different way. It was all very sweet and shed more light on her and her husband's relationship which was good. The part about making sacrifices in real life really struck a chord with me though, I think it is very true indeed.

The ending scene was nice as well. It was all quite hopeful for a while and I liked the lightness of it all. And then BAM the cliffhanger, haha. I enjoy cliffys so it was great. I believe the visitors are Nicholas and his family, so I am excited to see how things turn out further! Mikaela and Nic shall finally meet!

All in all, I really liked this chapter a lot and enjoyed it immensely. It is by far my favourite. The only CC I have for you is that there were some minor grammar problems here and there like switching of tenses and some awkward sounding sentences. A thorough re-read or a beta can easily fix those though =)

Besides that, it is all good. I liked Astoria's characterisation, the descriptions of the scene before jumping into the action, and the over all plot.

Keep writing! Great going! Feel free to re-request.

9/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi thereee!
You will love the next one then!
I love your reviews. They make me soo happy! hehe. Can't help re request!
thankyou! :D
There is a lot more to come :P
Em


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