ShadowRose again! Wow, that was a long time gap between reviews...
I like how this chapter starts in the same place the last one did: on the platform. It kind of shows how everything has changed, but at the same time, nothing has changed at all.
I can't really comment on Thalia's characterization yet, because I feel like we haven't fully gotten to know her yet. But so far, I like where you're going with it.
The run-in scene is cute. Some people (actually, a lot of reviewers I've encountered) would call that out as cliché, but personally, I really like it. I mean, hey, it's used often for a reason. People run into each other a lot. :)
Their banter is funny too. I can see how their relationship is similar to that of James and Lily (minus the constant asking-out.
Sirius's characterization, in my opinion, is spot-on. He's snarky (I seriously love that word... okay, side-note over) and a bit of a play-boy, which is exactly how I have always pictured him.
Lily's characterization is perfect too. Too many stories try to make her something she isn't, but you really captured her for who she is: a sweet and smart girl who cares about the rules.
The English word nerd in me loves the use of the word "insipid." Just thought I'd throw that out.
I like how you made comments about the ongoing war, but didn't make it the main topic of conversation either. I feel like too many stories lean to one extreme or the other, so I like the balance I see here. :)
Overall, great chapter, and this story looks really promising!
Author's Response: Hello there again! Don't worry about how long it takes, I'm just grateful that you're taking the time to do them :')
I'm glad that you liked how I started it, it just seemed like the best place, it was only until later that I realised that the prologue started there as well! Who cares about cliches, they're cliches because they work well :P I'm glad that you found it cute!
Yes their relationship is sort of similar to James and Lily's, but they become friends much quicker, and there's a lot less arguing!
Haha snarky is a cool word! I'm glad that you liked his characterisation, as he's such a hard person to write in my opinion!
Yes I get annoyed but some of the depictions of Lily too, so I'm glad that you liked her here! Insipid is a cool word, and don't worry I have a word of the day, so yay for English word nerds!
I'm glad that you liked the comments about the war, as it seemed natural to include them, but they're teenagers so they're not going to care too much about it!
Thanks again for another wonderful review!