I couldn't help picking this one, even though it's technically a song-fic and not a "one-shot." I love the song and think it's just perfect for Snape/Lily.
Um, holy cow. There's just not much else to say. Your emotion and your flow are pure perfection. I'm currently working on a project where I'm trying to really draw out the darkest, most deranged elements of Severus, and you inspire me to want to make my Severus better, to really reach this level of filth and degradation and pure insanity. I love how you kept making reference to potions, given that they are Snape's most natural weapons, and the many ways in which he would use them to win Lily--forcing the truth out of James, miraculously saving her cat after kidnapping it, 'clearing up' her mind and stealing her affection. I can picture him talking to the students about the subtle beauty of potion-making, staring right at Harry, and thinking these dark thoughts inside.
I love the story here, too. It's interesting to conceptualize Voldemort and Harry's canon life as just a figment of Severus's twisted imagination, like a defense mechanism he can use to justify why he and Lily should be together after James's death. You've got to love Lily's strength, too. It's crazy, because I usually jump right to Snape's side in the Snape/Potter debate, but here I'm rooting for her. The poor thing has been bought and paid for in Severus's mind, but she clearly has the ability to lead her own life without the help of a man, despite her grief over losing her husband.
I really don't know what else to say except I loved this and I really need to come back by your page more often. You're definitely a literary treasure.
(Oh, and thanks for the swap, haha.)
Author's Response: Lovely Amanda... I'm so sorry I've taken such a long time to respond to my reviews. This one was particularly naughty of me, seeing as it was a swap!
Now, how do I respond to such a lovely review?!
I love this song too, and one day it hit me that it sounded like Snape and then the idea just kept growing (or festering?!). And, as you can perhaps tell, it kept getting darker. I know you wrote this a while ago, so I'll have to stalk your AP and see if your project has come to fruition! It's such a compliment to hear that my work can inspire an excellent writer such as you - even if it is inspiration to make things filthier and nastier.
'Snapes most natural weapons' is such a good way of putting it... I really found it challenging but fun to think of the way twisted young Severus might dream of employing his potions. Your point about him teaching potions and looking at Harry made me shiver a little!
I wasn't sure whether to go with the AU aspect of this story, but I really wanted to plumb the deranged depths of Snape's mind, so I went for it. It's so good to see you point out Lily - I really wanted her character to come across in this story, because as you say, she's often left out of the Snape/Potter debate! And she's at the very heart of it! I was originally going to have Sirius waiting for her in the boat, but for the reasons you've stated, I wanted the only man she needed in her life to be Harry.
'Literary treasure'! Well, right back atcha!