Hello there, I’m here with your requested review! I was so excited to read this, as it just sounded so unusual and wonderful!
You got a sense of how Terry was straight away, and I thought that was great. You could tell that he was sort of pushy and determined to do well by the way he discussed who he had previously interviewed, and how Barnabus Cuffe was his ex-boss. He just seemed to think that he owned the place, and that he was rather ambitious, and though those are usually annoying traits it suited him well, and it seemed to fit his job title. Though I hate people like Terry in real life I enjoyed reading him as it made him interesting, I can’t say I like his character, but I enjoy reading him as he’s just so interesting and complex.
I liked the interspersed sections as well, I’ve never seen that done before, and I was slightly apprehensive when I saw you a/n that they would disrupt from the flow, but I found that they wove in easily, and just merged into the story, and they didn’t stick out at all. It also showed the other side of Terry as the womaniser. I liked how the identity of the woman was a mystery at first, so it made you wonder whether it was Daphne, or someone completely different. They definitely weren’t jarring.
It was interesting to see Terry’s infatuation with Daphne, as I wouldn’t have thought he would be the one to admit that someone was better than him, and I liked that twist, as it showed what powerful feelings that he felt for her. I also liked it because in my mind he wouldn’t have hated her at Hogwarts, as I’m used to everyone hating Slytherins, so it was interesting to see the twist of him liking her then.
I liked the contrast of Terry and Barnabus’s thoughts. It was almost humorous to see how much they differed. I liked the normality of Barnabus’ as we got to learn more about the Prophet, which had always interested me, as it was such a muggle thing in a magical world. Then there were Terry’s rather, ahem, interesting thoughts. It suggested to me that even though he appeared ambitious he perhaps wasn’t as many people thought.
Ah the ending we still didn’t get to find out who the mystery woman was, hopefully it will be revealed in the next chapter. You asked if this was cliché, it is most definitely not cliché, I have never ever read anything like this, and I think it’s great to be able to find something new in fan fiction, and I can tell that this story is definitely going to be unique.
I honestly have no CC’s for you, I searched desperately, but I couldn’t find a single thing that could be improved as it was just so good!
An excellent start, and feel free to re-request!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) I have trouble writing Terry because I hate him, but I'm also fascinated by him. If that makes sense. I really wanted to write a character who wasn't misunderstood, wasn't ambiguous - just plain bad. I'm really excited to keep writing. :)
Thank you so much for responding so quickly, and for leaving such a lovely review!