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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, I'm here from the review battle!

I enjoyed this piece quite a bit, particularly your descriptions of the boat in the stormy sea. The roiling water seems to match Georgia's own troubled thoughts, and I imagine that her seasickness is caused as much by her memories and anxiety about Azkaban as it is by the storm.

You leave some mysteries up to the imagination, as well. At first I thought the unnamed man might be a boyfriend or husband, but then I also thought that he could be her father. That seems a better fit, because of this line: "The time is long gone where I can be won over with candyfloss and swings in the park." He could also be an older brother. I like that his identity is left ambiguous, so that readers can supply their own answers. :)

I noticed a minor typo: "I can't cope with the endless apologises..." I believe it should be "apologies." Otherwise, grammar, punctuation and spelling are very good.

Great job!

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm very glad you liked my descriptions- its one thing I always think I'm not very good at! The imagery and metaphors you've picked up on- ah! Makes me very happy.

I intended the man to be Georgia's father, but an older brother could also work- there is also a line about Georgia using an old Charms book. Although I didn't explicitly say who he was, I really like your interpretations.

I've changed that typo now, thank you very much for reading and taking the time to review!


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