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Review:nott theodore says:

The speed of your updates is truly astounding! I don't know anyone else who updates so quickly and somehow you still manage to write really good chapters no matter how quickly you're writing them!

This chapter was great again and I'm so glad that James has Sirius to help him realise how awful he was being to Al, so that hopefully Al won't suffer like Sirius did and James won't be ridiculously prejudiced. I reckon he wouldn't have been anywhere near as angry that Albus got put in Slytherin if the hat hadn't suggested James should be put there himself...

I really enjoyed the conversation between Sirius and Neville. Neville has become one of the only people that Sirius can talk truthfully with, and in conversations like this one you can really see how much Sirius has matured and developed as a character. I thought the explanation about his brother and himself being sorted into different Houses at Hogwarts was really effective and that you wrote it really well.

Fred's character really makes me laugh a lot. Even when you don't mention him often, the occasions when you do are always funny - the coffee toffee strikes again!

This story is different to a lot of others I've read on this site and I think that's a really good thing, as the plotline seems very original and it's a lot easier for you to avoid cliches! Beyond The Veil is one of my favourite favourites (if that even makes sense) and I hope you keep the quick updates coming, because I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

nott theodore :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I always love reading your reviews because they really inspire and motivate me to continue updating. :) You're are really awesome.

As for the speed, I'm currently on break and the backlog is only about a day - so quick updates seem to be in order. I use to be about three chapters ahead when I started, but now I'm only about one. The updates might slow down soon - because of exams coming up for me - but I'll still try to have at least one or two a week. :)

I really enjoy writing this and it's also motivating me to write my own stories (apart from fan-fiction). :)

James is lucky to have Sirius as a friend. And it's also lucky that Sirius saw past his own prejudice and realized his mistakes in the past. I used Sirius to draw the parallels so James could understand a little better. James is still young so he didn't really see that what he was doing was wrong. But you are right in saying that James was a bit more angry at Al, because the Sorting Hat wanted to put him in Slytherin as well. Since he was put in Gryffindor, he just see Albus being placed in Slytherin as a betrayal, even though Albus did show courage in leaving his fate up to the hat.

After the very few conversations Neville and Sirius did have - I had a lot of comments on almost every one of them. I felt like it would be good to add some more, because like you said - Neville is one of the only ones he can talk with and not hide anything. Even with James he doesn't have this liberty.

I'm glad you liked that scene though. I was thinking about just having Sirius and Neville talk alone in a different chapter, but I felt that James being there would help him understand and resolve the whole prejudice thing faster.

Haha, I'm glad you like Fred. I enjoy writing him and making up odd things for him to do - although I feel bad, because he isn't in it as often as I would like. And I like the Coffee Toffee. I thought it would be natural if it came back up again - it's just a Fred-like thing to do in my head. Although, Fred was getting a bit annoyed at James and Sirius in this chapter.

Thank you so much for all the kind words. :) That makes me feel super awesome and I'm really glad that my story is one of your favorite favorites. XD

The next chapter will be up soon. I'm just editing it and even finishing up the one after that. :)

Thank you so much and I can't wait to see your next review!


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