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Review:adluvshp says:
Ooh I really liked this! I have never read much of Astoria before, though I have written her myself once or twice, and I must say that I like your portrayal of her. Never having been mentioned in the books, she is pretty much a blank slate and I like how you've characterized her.

The internal struggle she went through in the beginning - torn between staying or fighting - was really well written. Her confusion came through well, and so did her determination once she decided to stay. I loved how you compared leaving the war to closing a book on its best part. It showed another aspect of Astoria's personality and I enjoyed that. Of course, the analogy itself was quite clever and accurate.

I found the ending to be the most interesting. It was definitely a unique spin to things. Usually, as what I've seen in other "war stories", the story ends with the person fighting or something of that sort, but I liked your ending a lot. The way her sister came in and actually imperiused her was very original. It also showed us a brief glimpse into Daphne - whether she was trying to protect her sister or had some other motive wasn't clear - but it was clear that she would go to any lengths (even use an unforgivable) to get what she wants done, so great job there.

Hats off, for such an original, well-written, and nicely expressed story. I don't have any CC for you! Great job =)

10/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm glad you liked it so much, especially the end - I was really wondering whether everyone else would enjoy it as much as I was hoping. :P

Thank you so much for such a lovely review. :)


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