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Review:adluvshp says:
Hi there.

Wow, this was surely a powerful piece of writing. I loved this brief glimpse into a prisoner's mind as she is being taken to Azkaban.

The memory was very sad as it made me realize that what happened was an accident - she only cast the expelliarmus after all - and yet she is being imprisoned for it. I'd have liked to get more insight into her emotions and feelings she was experiencing at the moment though.

I loved your descriptions, it made an image of a stormy sea float in front my eyes. The ending was thoughtful too, I liked how Georgia wondered about the other prisoners and at the same time not being able to make up her mind whether what she did was right or wrong.

I don't have any CC for you except that I'd have liked this to be longer. Maybe I would have sympathized with Georgia more if we had seen more of her in the story. Her character was very vague to me and I didn't understand who she was and what kind of a persons she was entirely so it was hard for me to really feel her.

But apart from that, this was pretty good. Sometimes, the mood and the theme sets the story enough that you don't need character development xD

Great work! 9/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hey Deets :)

Thank you! I'm very happy you enjoyed it. I'm glad you liked my descriptions, it's not one of my strong points.

I'm going to say I disagree with you on it being longer so we could empathise with Georgia more. I wanted the whole point of this to be that we didn't understand, that her guilt was ambiguous and that her character wasn't fully developed- it was only intended to be a snapshot of her life.

Thanks for the review!


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