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Review:HallowsAndHorcruxes says:
This is a story that I really enjoyed reading especially the back and forth between Ellie and Albus. I is really quite entertaining to read and defiantly up my street for humor. I am also a fan of the fact that you have it started the story off outside of Hogwarts in there homes as it gives the story a bit of a difference from other stories, something that I must say I really enjoy. It's nice to see magical people in the muggle world.

There is one tip I would give you to improve this a little which is to add about of description about what your two OC's look like as for now I'm not quite sure. I only picked up on this as I have a tendency to do it myself so maybe it's something you could slip into a later chapter? Though your description of Albus was wonderful as I was able to picture him in the scene from your character's point of view. Keep up the good work!

~Hallows!

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm glad you enjoyed the banter between Ellie and Albus. I enjoy writing Albus, so I'm happy to hear that you liked it! And yeah, starting a story at Hogwarts didn't feel like it would work for the plot - so another yay that you thought it was a bit original!

The physical descriptions of the OCs is planned for chapter 3, I think. I couldn't find a way to fit it in here, but it should definitely happen in chapter 3! There is a bit of description about what Chris looks like in the next chapter, but I'll probably expand on that. Thanks for the tip!

And thank you for the wonderful review! I'll be heading over now to re-request!


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