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Review:ShadowRose says:
Hi there, it's ShadowRose with your requested review!

First of all, I love little prologues like this. I think they set the scene perfectly, and give a lot of background for when we go into the next chapter.

I love the way you describe things here. Your word choice is just perfect, and I can clearly picture the entire scene in my head as I'm reading.

Sometimes, I feel like it jumps from character to character a little too quickly, but at the same time, I think it works out okay. It kind of serves to emphasize the chaos of the platform.

Another thing I liked was the contrast you made between Sirius and Thalia. Even though there's not much characterization to go on, the reader sees the opposite situations with each: Sirius's parents are overbearing, while Thalia's are absent altogether. But they're alike in that they both feel uncomfortable with the whole situation. I like how you tied them together. I also think it's funny that they both selected their future best friends the exact same way; it really shows that they may not be so different after all.

Shallow note: I love the name Thalia. I think it's gorgeous, and completely unique.

Finally, I love how you tie the whole chapter together by incorporating the title name. It works really well.

Overall, I really enjoyed this chapter. Keep up the good work! :)

-ShadowRose

Author's Response: Hi ShadowRose, thanks for the review!

I'm glad that you liked the prologue, as I love them too, and it wouldn't feel right not having one!

Yes I get what you mean about it jumping a little quickly, but I was trying to replicate the chaos of the problem, I'll see if I can make it smoother though!

I'm glad that you liked the contrast between the two, as I enjoyed writing it! I'm writing chapters with both their parents in right now, and it's so much fun to do! Yes it seemed only natural to meet their best friends there, and we know from canon that James and Sirius bonded straight away, so I figured Lily might do the same!

Ha don't worry about the shallow note, I loved the name too, and it just felt right, given that it had mythological links to it, and so did many of the other HP names!

I'm glad that you enjoyed the little tie in with the title, I just couldn't resist it :P

Thank you for the great review,

-Kiana :D

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