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Review:TheMarauderChick says:
Hi! I'm Sankavi here from the BvB :)

I will tell you ahead of time that I wrote this down as I was reading so sorry if it doesn't really flow all that well at the beginning :)

Okay, so, the first thing I started wondering was, who is her mum? Also, is she some kind of troublemaker? (Amelie, not the mum) Is that why she didn't become Head Girl? You leave the reader wondering a lot of these questions which makes us want to read more to find the answers! Also, having this in just the first few paragraphs is great!

I love how you get right into Amelie analyzing what the relationship between her and James is. It gets right to the action (sorta) which I like because, well I'm not sure, but I think it's really nice! (or it's at least different from a lot of other stories I've read)

I'm not sure if you intended this to happen, but I got giddy when I saw the word raining! I feel like it's a good sign when you spot the title in the text ;)

Ahhh! So they've had past experiences smooching huh? (okay maybe not really. but still) And asdfkjlsdf SHE KISSED HIM!!! AND HE WENT WITH IT!!! Totally not weird at all ;)

I'm really excited to see where this story is going to go from here and what kind of plots unravel! Expect to see me reviewing a few more of these chapters ;)

-Sankavi ^_^

Author's Response: Hello! Thanks for stopping by!

I always struggle when it comes to first chapters. I struggle to fit in backstory, action, and character introductions, and I find it so difficult to do it in a relatively subtle way, and because this was my first pic ever, I don't think I did it particularly well!

"Hey, that's the name of the show!" Yeah, but the fact it's called Raining and that it rains all the time is a bit of pathetic fallacy - but you'll have to keep reading!

Thanks for reviewing!

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