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Review:Hogwarts27 says:
This was another good chapter. This may be your first fan-fic, but it feels like you've done plenty of other writing, because your work is pretty polished. It's a nice read.

Okay, here again, I thought Minerva crying was out of character for her. She just doesn't strike me as the crying type, even when under extreme stress, but again, I didn't let a minor little thing like that bother me. I know you're trying to explore some of the emotional trauma characters are feeling.

I did think Snape's apology to the healer was a little too soft and overdone, considering she's a person he scarcely remembers, and even for a man who's been given a second chance at life and who probably WOULD want to make a few apologies. The degree of his apology also made me suspect right away that these two have a romance coming, which feels just a little too predictable if that's what's really what's going to happen. And the healer being excessively overseeing about everything that happened to Snape was pretty much a giveaway as well. I'll see if I'm right about the romance as the story goes on, although I'm not really a romance lover. I'm really just interested in the Snape/Harry aspect of the story, and seeing what you'll do with a Snape as a character.

On the other hand, I think you portrayed Snape with Shacklebolt quite well as a 'softer' Snape who might want to live his life in a better way. And I like that you have him wanting to be an instructor instead of the Headmaster. But that's because I think Minerva makes the perfect headmistress in the absence of Dumbledore, and Snape is so interesting in the classroom even when he's nasty. Both potions and DADA instructor suit him perfectly well.

Author's Response: Thanks for another insightful review. I did take some of your advice here and edited McGonagall's reaction to Harry to make it a bit more believable.

As for Snape's apology to Healer Prewett, I just see this time spent all vulnerable and confused in the hospital as a bit of a wake-up call for Snape where is struggling to come to terms with Voldemort being dead and finally being free and not having to put on his little "act" anymore. As such I think he is having to face a great many things from his past and he is overwhelmed and even maybe a bit embarrassed by the things he has done.

I hope this makes sense. I sometimes forget that people can't see inside my mind as well as I can which may make things pretty confusing for people! LOL!

Thanks again for the read & review!


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