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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Oooh, this was a great second chapter! I really wish there was a third chapter right now, so I could keep reading on. I'm enjoying this story so far, and I'm really glad you decided to start a WIP - I love all of your one-shots and writing so much!

Anyway, I liked that we were introduced to several more characters in this chapter without their introductions feeling forced or making the flow disjointed. I especially liked Teddy - he seemed to have quite a calm, reasonably personality, which was a nice contrast to Dom in this chapter as she was very dramatic and upset in this chapter. I also liked Victoire, which I was surprised about. She seemed quite a strong character and was also pretty calm...most of the time.

I liked the fact that Dom broke down a bit and that Teddy stayed by her side...but I couldn't believe that Fleur and Victoire just ran out of the room like that! Then again, Dom was doing a very good job of pushing them away.

I liked all of the mentions of Remus, and how Dom refused to hear that he was a good man, even though he was a werewolf. It's clear that she's already made up her mind that she's a monster...and it's going to take a lot to change that. I'm not really sure why, but one of my favourite bits of this chapter was the comment about Harry's pensive. I think it was because I found it funny, thinking about which memories Harry would put in there, especially the ones that we read about in the books.

Anyway, this was yet another great chapter. Can't wait to read the next one!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a ton for reading and reviewing again. Sorry for the delay in responding!

I am glad you liked this chapter as well. I am currently in the middle of writing the third chapter and hopefully it should be up soon! I am so flattered that you like all my works, thanks.

Its a relief to know that the other characters introduced in this chapter didn't seem forced. Yes, I wanted Teddy to be this calm rational person (I imagine him a lot like Remus that way) who can actually control Dom's fiery and dramatic attitude. Victoire is a complex character and we'll see more of her soon.

Aw well poor Fleur couldn't take it at all, and though Victoire tried, she couldn't take it in the end either.

I am pleased that Dom's thoughts came across well to you. Its great to know that you liked the pensive bit - it is a little amusing yes, to think of an older Harry putting his memories there.

Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing and I hope to see you around for the next!


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