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Review:academica says:
Hi Angie! I'm stopping by from Review Tag :)

I'm going to try to hit all the points you mentioned in your PM when you originally asked me to review this.

Interest level--you've definitely got me wondering what's going to happen next! I like how you ended this chapter on a cliffhanger. I feel like I barely know Dominique, and I wonder how this tragedy is going to influence the development of her personality. So I don't see this as filler; normally I wouldn't like to get so much back story in the first chapter, but I liked how Dominique took advantage of the time to think while waiting on the wolves.

Style/Flow--I think the flow here was pretty good. I'm always a little hesitant about prolonged use of the past participle tense (i.e., 'had been'). I think that little section in the middle with lots of 'hads' detracts a little bit from the good, smooth present-tense flow of the rest of the chapter. Otherwise, this is nice, and I can see your writing style coming through just like in your one-shots.

Characterization--I like Dominique so far. She seems a little plucky and headstrong, and yet I like how you went into her intense fear of the wolves. I wonder how she'll cope with having been bitten? As I mentioned before, I don't know her that well yet, which is totally fine for a first chapter. No worries.

Plot--Good so far. I don't read enough next-gen to know for sure if it's cliche, but I don't think so. There are a lot of werewolf stories on the archive, but I'm sure you'll do well to make it your own.

Bottom line, I do think this is worth continuing. I'm proud of you for branching out into chaptered fic and I hope this is just the first of many to come. (Best to start slow, though, just like you've stated.)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey Amanda! Thanks for stopping by! Sorry for the delay in responding!

I am pleased that you liked the cliffhanger and it got you intrigued. I hope I am able to develop Dom further in the chapters. It's a relief that you don't see this as a filler, I was wary of putting in so much information in the first chapter, but it all seemed necessary.

Thanks for the little tip off about the paragraph with "had beens". I'll try to see what I can do about it when I edit it. I am glad you found it nice overall though.

I am pleased you like Dominique so far, and I hope you're satisfied with how I develop her further, and that you get to know her better as the story progresses.

I know there are a lot of werewolf stories out there, but usually they focus more on the societal situation and the transformations etc. and not much on the character's feelings and changes in general, so hopefully I'll be able to give it my original spin.

Thanks so much for your lovely encouraging words and I hope so too!

Love,
Angie


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